Safe Strong Pure
Apr/090
Safe Strong Pure
what do you think of this somewhat of a poem?? another one?
I know that it's taking long
just open your heart and be strong
because we can make it through this day
So don't say anything tonight
even if it's a goodbye, I wont let you forget about our distant smiles
even if it's beyond the miles
ill be by your side
and hold you tight into my arms with pride
I believe i can stay, safe with you
I'd be safe with you
when all hope is down
you pull me away from this shadow
left by my own misery
its such a big mystery
how much I have grown into this
such a pure feeling that just for once I'm important to someone to even exists
so just wait for me
And time will tell
that all this love
wont be fallen into hell
If love is a labor
Then I'd enslave until the end
and hope my heart will mend
and reach into the clouds
to ascend
It's good, but some of the rhymes are overused, and/or don't flow well.
Ex: long, strong.
There aren't any real "rules", but I would try to have a rhyme pattern/scheme.
But emotionally, it was amazing.
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